背离

belliwether

<>背离<BR><BR>多重的喉结发出多重的声音<BR>我们穿过村庄，夜，雪地<BR>来到了城市，冷吗，你？<BR>你不哭，因为你还不够悲切<BR>或者已经足够孤独<BR>音乐零落，耳膜坚硬<BR>生命中枢陷入冷静和麻木<BR>过去是很快乐，可是<BR>我们早已离开了自己<BR>风又能怎么样？<BR>灯光又能怎么样？<BR>爱情又能怎么样？<BR>眼睛呆滞的抵抗<BR>已经昭示了乞降<BR></P>

<><FONT color=#5e5ea2>Far Away</FONT></P>
<><FONT color=#5e5ea2>so many people,<BR>so many words,<BR>We stred through village,<BR>night and snow ground,<BR>finally arrived at the city.<BR>Were you feeling any cold?<BR>No tears did you have,<BR>because you were not sad enough<BR>or completely isolated.<BR>Music was falling,<BR>but ears dead.<BR>The spirint was totally <BR>numb and freezen.<BR>The past was happy, but<BR>we had lost for long.<BR>What could the wind do?<BR>What could the light do?<BR>What could the love do?<BR>Dim eyes were fighting against <BR>rising mist ,<BR>which standing for <BR>surrendered.</FONT></P>

陈坚盈

译得好啊

曾蒙

问候了!

李丽琴

<>中英文之间产生了很大的距离哦.如:<FONT color=#000000><STRONG><U>多重</U></STRONG>的<STRONG><U>喉结</U></STRONG>发出<STRONG><U>多重</U></STRONG>的声音</FONT><BR><FONT color=#5e5ea2>so <U><STRONG>many</STRONG> <STRONG>people</STRONG></U>,<BR>so <U><STRONG>many words</STRONG></U>,  </FONT><FONT color=#000000>这几个词似乎不能传达你中文诗句的意思.</FONT><BR>另:译文也要如原文那样干净利落,如关联词及原文中本没有的副词.</P>
<>建议您以后有译文的诗歌帖到翻译区.谢谢!</P>

周瑟瑟

<>好译诗。</P>